You are different
I see you sneaking in the
shadows
I watch you change in the
light of the moon
I am the same as you
I am different than them
Just like you
We are wolves
I sneak in the shadows
I change in the light of the
moon
We have instincts that we
follow
We are not another group of
posers
We are wolves
We are different from them
We will never be the same
You see the difference
I see the difference
They will never see the
difference
We are wolves
We are strong and fast
They are weak and slow
We are at the mercy of the
moon
Of the cycle
We are wolves
We change in the moon beams
They now know our secret
We are in danger
We need to run
We need to be wild
We are wolves
We are a pack
We are free
We are wolves
This poem made me smile; wolves also have a place in my own writing! I really liked the imagery you used with the shadows and the moon, which alludes to a comparison of dark and light. The repetition of certain lines throughout the poems was very effective as well. I like how the speaker in this poem seems to have found a companion and it is evoked in the idea of a wolf pack. You may want to consider changing the line "We are not another group of posers". I find this line to be a little confusing. It sounds like the speaker is making another distinction between the "We" and the "They" within the poem. You may want to consider using different verbage to clarify exactly what kind of distinction you are trying to make. Another thing I liked about the poem is how "they" is rarely capitalized while "We" is almost always capitalized. I think this really adds to the poem in that it emphasizes your point that the "We" in the poem is better than "they". Maybe consider making this idea uniform throughout the poem but making every "We" capitalized and keep every "they" in lowercase. I really enjoyed reading this poem, keep up the great work! :)
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